Outer Sanctum Security Post NR755.
Peninsular
Personnel Log
Name: Cajun Hans Kar Chun
Age: 21
Status: Class 3 Transport Personnel
Entry: 0016 Hours,
I’m beat today. The Chief rounded us up to clear the unused supply crates at the facility storehouses today to make way for the transport and supplies. It was a big mess, and we’re not only dealing with supply crates. There were also cargo containers, broken machinery and two unused big ass water tanks (why it was in the storehouses still baffled us). There were several bodies too, found trapped behind wooden crates and inside most of the cargo containers. Most of them were military personnel, but we also found a few bodies that we presumed were some of the Demented killed during the March 3rd upsurge. Jim found a poor soul that seemingly had gnawed at his own wrists till death. I figured that he must’ve been infected, but the chief said that sometimes someone can become a Demented without an infection. I couldn’t agree less.
We discarded the bodies into the incinerator alongside with a few others found scattered around the post. NR755 was said to be housing 200 or so soldiers before its capture, but there were only 32 dead bodies found and 21 of them were military personnel. I believe the remaining 168 soldiers must’ve become the Demented, and had left.
We caught up with a couple of the tech guys at the canteen who wanted some of Lawrence Hanky’s VIVID videos (which I traded in for some
Carl from the infantries stopped by our bunker to trade out some booze he found at the A bunkers (a six-pack for the Playboy Playmate specials, and I threw in a
Sometime at
I miss Emily, and I hope that she’s alright. The satellite phones aren’t fixed yet.
2 comments:
sue me for being anal but you know how much of a perfectionist i can get on this. maaf ya?=P
1) vocab tends to repeat sometimes. unless its a catchy play of words that u intend on scattering throughout the story, try to vary the choice of phrases.
2) another thing ima harp on is spelling. im sure u know what its like to be gleefully reading a neat piece of work and suddenly be thrown off-track by a word that makes no sense no matter how your rearrange the letters. for me, it just keeps bugging me and totally ruins the experience.
u got good writing going on. dont let trivial inconsistencies be a setback.
PS: haha, good try. im not even tempted to take up the tag=P
PPS: i was going through my librarything and i realised that i really have read quite a number of stephen kings=P itd be so much better though if i could remember what in the world ive readXD
will watch it, thanks for the advice =)
awwwwww was hoping you'd try and do the tag, but i'm kinda guessing you won't anyhow :P
you not remembering what u read? hmm well you gave me a hell load of insight on the Green Mile, and i'm dead impressed by it. i daresay you remember more that u claim
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